Critique this song I wrote (best critique gets 10 points)?
What’s wrong love?
You look as if a boulder’s on your shoulders
Is there anything that I can do for you?
If were in a rut love
Don’t worry cause I won’t be going anywhere
I’ll be by your side until forever ends
I’d put every ounce of pain you carry on my heart
And I’d take every cut and bruise upon your skin
I’m not immortal and I’m not superman
But you babe have everything I am
You’re looking good love
The smile on your face lights up my world
Is there any way that I can keep you blessed?
Is there any way that I can keep you laughing?
You are golden
You are gold in my eyes